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She hates the cruel, hateful passage of time
Too quickly it passes and then too slow.
She hates the long distance, so far, a crime,
Much too far, on cold feet, for her to go.

She hates her bloodthirsty, vile Mistress Heart,
Who commands her to feel much too strongly.
She hates her simple companions’ small part
Of speaking on feelings oft too fondly.

She hates the need for complete distraction,
Painstaking efforts to keep herself sane.
Finally, she hates all the time spent ‘lone,
Thoughts wander across the plains of her brain.

And yet she loves him, he who is the cause
Of all her feelings and her breath’s slight pause.
©2008-2009 ~LonelyKatt
:iconlonelykatt:

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Written: 11/18/08

A Shakespearean sonnet. Also known as the Elizabethan sonnet. If you don't know how that is composed, four quatrains of ABAB CDCD EFEF, followed by couplet, GG, which is usually where there is a shift in tone or subject. Written in iambic pentameter. If you don't know what that is... google it.

I aim to write a Petrarchan, or Italian, sonnet as well.

For Kiltian Lover, as per usual. The missing has gotten a bit extreme lately the past couple days.

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:iconforsakenindeath:
God damn, a sonnet? That's impressive. Those can be a pain in the ass to write. Course, I fail at writting so that might account for it.

It's very very good. I'm envious of your skills and may quote your sonnet for later use and facebook statuses if you do not mind? :P

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There are always ghosts in the well. I can't call them echoes, because the sounds I hear all were made too long ago.
The splash of coins in the water.
Voices whispering their wishes
Secrets.
Nobody was supposed to hear them.
But I do.
:iconlonelykatt:
No, it took about an hour to spit out the basic words and then another half an hour of rereading and rearranging and rewording, so yes, you could say sonnets are a pain in the ass to write. Especially the ten syllables a line thing.

And thank you very, very much. And yes, because it's you, you can quote my sonnet in your facebook statuses and whatnot. And if anyone asks, you know where to point them.

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:ahoy: You know you love the pirate smex :ahoy:
:iconforsakenindeath:
Eek, I've written one in a group of 4, and it was lame and hard then. I can't imagine by myself :iconscaredplz:
I will remain in my hole of not-writing-ness.

And yay! Because there are some lovely lines that I'm particularly caught by. :iconinloveplz:

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There are always ghosts in the well. I can't call them echoes, because the sounds I hear all were made too long ago.
The splash of coins in the water.
Voices whispering their wishes
Secrets.
Nobody was supposed to hear them.
But I do.
:iconlonelykatt:
Oh~~ Oh~~ Tell me which, tell me which!!

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:ahoy: You know you love the pirate smex :ahoy:
:iconsucubusbriarrose:
very nice. "oft too fondly" ...*blushes* You are a great writer, I should try a sonnet again. They make you really think.

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What a feeling in my soul, Love burns brighter than sunshine
:iconlonelykatt:
Not to worry. It's not just you that I was thinking about there, even my own family.

Sonnets are fun :D

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:ahoy: You know you love the pirate smex :ahoy:
:iconforsakenindeath:
She hates her bloodthirsty, vile Mistress Heart,
Who commands her to feel much too strongly.


and

She hates the need for complete distraction,
Painstaking efforts to keep herself sane.
Finally, she hates all the time spent ‘lone,


:D all of them are awesome, just those 2 1/2 are my favorite.

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There are always ghosts in the well. I can't call them echoes, because the sounds I hear all were made too long ago.
The splash of coins in the water.
Voices whispering their wishes
Secrets.
Nobody was supposed to hear them.
But I do.
:iconsucubusbriarrose:
they are!

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What a feeling in my soul, Love burns brighter than sunshine
:iconlonelykatt:
Yay! It's nice to know what is likeable about my poems. For one, it's totally a feel-good feeling, and for two, it's kind of like a mental poll, this is something that makes my poetry attractive, and away it gets logged into the brain.

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:ahoy: You know you love the pirate smex :ahoy:

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